Amber Swanson puts the pieces of her best friend’s disappearance together,
Clearly not my cup of tea, you very well might feel differently. Whatever my thoughts venture for yourself.
Love the surprise twist, very well done. Amber is a 15/16 year old, snarky, angry, defiant and a bastard child (authors words, not mine), a little more character development to further explain why she is the way she is would be nice, as it stands the reader bears the burden of why with an awful lot of assuming.
Her reaction to the horrid discovery is absolutely implausible, she would be freaked out as anyone would be stumbling upon what she did. The auspicious narrative needs heavy editing. The numerous grammatical errors deter from the reading experience. The plot is good, would be great if Amber wasn’t 16 years old but older. She vacillates from being a immature brat to acting half human, her personality is annoying, difficult to like the girl.
Weighty subject matter was addresses but sloughed off casually. A big no no in my book. If you introduce touchy topics you should resolve them properly otherwise edit/omit please.
With a more mature and developed protagonist in combination with the somewhat promising plot, this novella could pass muster to an average audience. Solid strong editing would vastly improve the entire undertaking. Clean up the heavy topics with clear resolution, messy as is. A fast pace read, in need of fine tuning.
On a side note: I am so tired of children with an unmarried parent referred to as a bastard. It’s 2015 can we please stop with the negative labeling. Do we refer to a fetus escaping abortion as ‘an almost aborted human?’ I say this as a mother to a ‘bastard child’….STOP.
Paperback, 222 pages
Published May 24th 2014 by Melissa Wolff